Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.

A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milky way. She sees a creature floating towards her. She begins to shake with fear. She was cold in space and she was not going back to earth and she was still in space and then she could not breath that long then she died.